Lara’s 100 word story- Let me know what you think!

//Lara’s 100 word story- Let me know what you think!

One snowy winter day in olden Germany, everyone was gathering in the local bar. The maiden, Mildred, who was giving out the beers was having a hard time rushing back and forth, giving everyone beer and brandy. Tab, the cat, who was comfortably dozing on the stove, gave a meow when the door swung open. In came Taylor.

The people gasped for Taylor’s chest was bleeding! Mildred dashed over to Taylor and bandaged him up. As Mildred was doing this, the people begged him to tell them how his chest came to bleed. Just then a stranger came in…

By |2017-06-21T09:01:40+00:00March 3rd, 2015|Pupil Blog|10 Comments

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  1. bethan March 5, 2015 at 8:13 pm - Reply

    Suspense. Du du du!!
    Love it :)
    I wanna know who this stranger is

    • Lara March 17, 2015 at 1:44 pm - Reply

      The stranger is the one who injured Taylor. ;)

  2. MISS COOK March 17, 2015 at 11:34 am - Reply

    I really liked your use of the embedded clause when you mentioned Tab, the cat. And your short sentence for effect was great! “In came Taylor” had a real impact on me as the audience!

  3. Dominic Mason March 17, 2015 at 1:42 pm - Reply

    Great Story!!

  4. Lara March 17, 2015 at 1:43 pm - Reply

    yay

  5. archie March 17, 2015 at 1:49 pm - Reply

    who is it i want to know make a second one

  6. lara April 28, 2015 at 1:38 pm - Reply

    th stranger is the one who injured taylor

  7. Lara May 22, 2015 at 1:29 pm - Reply

    ok i’ll make a second

    • Lara May 22, 2015 at 1:30 pm - Reply

      ok I’ll make a second one

  8. Mary June 4, 2015 at 10:15 pm - Reply

    Lara, you know how to write a gripping story that leaves the reader wanting more. You have set the scene beautifully with your descriptive writing. Well done. Very proud of you

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